Monday, August 30, 2010

"otherwise, you'll kill yourself"

i think i'm screaming in a monologue,
and writing in a song

and i think i'm watching with a half-closed eye
and trying not to smile
when you tell me that you are happy;
life needs more happy people
and it needs more sad ones,
too;

they make it feel better to be happy,
and they make it feel better to be happy
and they, and they, and they, they make it feel so much better to be fucking joyful for once

but i think, seriously,
that you should watch the way you look at her;
it'll hurt, man, but
its just you and me
against every fucking thing
and its too late;
so watch out, man. don't fall for her now
or you'll just kill yourself.
otherwise, you'll just kill yourself
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1 comment:

  1. "and it needs more sad ones too
    To make us feel real"
    -didn't like that part much. Seemed too forced, didn't flow well with the energy of the poem.

    "but I think, seriously
    that you should watch the way you look at her
    it'll hurt man, but
    its just you and me"
    -VERY VERY NICE. Really great line bro. Very real. Very you.

    "So watch out man. dont fall for her now
    Or you'll kill yourself
    otherwise you'll kill yourself"
    Perfect ending. Great job bro. Really impressive.

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